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when your eyelashes begin to meet your cheeks, and the only thing you can see is the flashing twinkle of distant stars, your going to remember me. remember the way my eyes flitted left and right when someone was too close. the way my breathing (and my heart) hitched at the sight of you, the curve of my hip beneath your hand.

and when your bed sheets rustle across the bottoms of your legs, your going to dream about me. your going to dream of the way i liked to stand in the middle of the street as a car raced my way. your going to think of the way i didn't move until the very last second. the way i found love hidden in the corners of rooms, under beds, in closets; the way i stared out the window and followed your taillights with my eyes instead of my feet.

and when the moonlight flashes between the cracks in your curtains, your going to wish for me. your going to wish for a hand to fill the spaces between your fingers. your going to wish for the sound of music to fill your house again, to see my fingers fly across the keys that you never understood. your going to wish for another chance, one more go.


and when worlds collide, and oceans overflow, your going to think of me.
but the world will be over, and there will be far too much water
for us to ever cross.
our chance will have come and gone,


and i will already be a part of your past.<sub>
it feels good to be writing again

inspired by corina90's: you'll think of me [link]
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urban-lingo Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
the ending is pretty awestricking. [idk if thats a word, but its my new word from now on]
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beneath-the-surface Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2010
haha thank you ever so much dear [: p.s. i like your word whether it exists or not
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urban-lingo Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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brokenshatter Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2009
Wow this was very visual I was picturing it as I was reading it. Good Job that's hard to do.
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beneath-the-surface Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2009
thanks so much darlingg.
it means a lot to me when that happens
[:
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Doreda-Lorinda Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2009
i like it. you seem to be missing something, but maybe that's because i've mistakenly expected you to have corina90's style.

your style is your own, and it's wonderful to me as it is.


just to help, check your use of "your" versus "you're"
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beneath-the-surface Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2009
thank you so much for your feedback
[:
and i'll be sure to check my yours and you'res
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Doreda-Lorinda Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2009
you're welcome.
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missnmemories Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2009
babe, i luv it!!! =], i wonder if it relates to someone =/ luv u =]
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beneath-the-surface Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2009
eawoijf!
shpanks girlfrandddd.
and yeah, kinda sorta, in a not direct, indirect kind of way.
haah
[:

p.s. i luhhh youuu.
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missnmemories Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2009
ur vry welcome...haha yeah i realized some similiarities and stuff lol =]
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3wyl Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow...

The ending is so profound! I really like the imagery and the tone throughout this piece.

The repetition creates a more potent impact and the ending... the ending concludes this so well. :nod:
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beneath-the-surface Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2009
aww.. you have no idea how much that means to me.
thanks so so much love.
:hug:
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